I'm glad you like the beginning. I agree there just isn't enough decent Shayid. I recommend Mrs. Tater and Giant Panda ove at fanfiction.net very highly. And usually ff.net is nothing but a slew of...shitty fic for lack of a better term.

And I never mind constructive criticism or just a note of an error I've over looked. You obviousl read the fic and had other comments, so it's more then fine. ;)

~Toni